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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote:
> George Dance wrote: > > > I'll read this to the new crowd tonight and see how it goes over with > > them. > > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, > anyhow... > > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > > http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' sounds really nice to my ears. > and/or renaming her altogether and including (maybe) a reference to "girl > with the elephant tatoo"... which will add some imagery to it. > > > > > Being locals, mostly, they'll have a better chance of recognizing some of > > the images. > > > The more I think about this one, though, the more I can visualize what a > > nice video it would make, if I (or someone else) could get the images from > > the original dream right... hopefully I'll get the chance to pull that > trick > > off eventually. > > > > So, what to do? Two options: i) you can break the poem into sections, > > > by numbering the sections (i, ii, iii, ...). But I wouldn't do that > > > here - > > In a way I like the "sections" idea... which in performance can be noted by > shifts in the music... probably the same melody line/chords, with different > lead players for the sections... > OK; in that case I'd suggest either arabic or lower-case roman numerals (upper case Roman would look too pretentious). You might want to keep the ellipses anyway ... |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote:
> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: > > > George Dance wrote: > > > > I'll read this to the new crowd tonight and see how it goes over with > > > them. > > > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, > > anyhow... > > > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > > >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > > I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > sounds really nice to my ears. > Ganesha girl can dance. Although she cannot fly, she spins a into a trance like Dumbo in the sky. Ganesha girl can sing an old-fashioned ghazal. Her pretty words take wing so like the bulbul's call. Ganesha girl is large but graceful on her feet. She flows just like a barge, and never takes her seat. more trimeter. ghazal = Urdu love poem bulbul = song bird native to asia |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
In article <1179856060.715226.187860@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, baloney
says... > >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: >> >> > George Dance wrote: >> >> > > I'll read this to the new crowd tonight and see how it goes over with >> >> > them. >> >> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the >> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title >> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, >> > anyhow... >> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >> >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >> sounds really nice to my ears. >> > >Ganesha girl can dance. >Although she cannot fly, >she spins a into a trance >like Dumbo in the sky. > >Ganesha girl can sing >an old-fashioned ghazal. >Her pretty words take wing >so like the bulbul's call. > >Ganesha girl is large >but graceful on her feet. >She flows just like a barge, >and never takes her seat. > >more trimeter. > >ghazal = Urdu love poem >bulbul = song bird native to asia I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder Saw the stars crashing Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder I saw they stars crashing down most sincerely, GodBuilt -- ----------------------------------------------- "I like to drink, I like to drive, I like to think all of the Jews got out of the Holocaust alive, my name is Mel, and can't you tell, I like Tequila!" Denis Leary |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
On May 22, 10:47 am, baloney <k...@mindspring.com> wrote:
> On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: > > > > > > > On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: > > > > George Dance wrote: > > > > > I'll read this to the new crowd tonight and see how it goes over with > > > > them. > > > > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > > > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > > > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, > > > anyhow... > > > > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > > > >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > > > I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > > sounds really nice to my ears. > > Ganesha girl can dance. > Although she cannot fly, > she spins a into a trance > like Dumbo in the sky. > > Ganesha girl can sing > an old-fashioned ghazal. > Her pretty words take wing > so like the bulbul's call. > > Ganesha girl is large > but graceful on her feet. > She flows just like a barge, > and never takes her seat. > > more trimeter. > So's this: I bring you with reverent hands The books of my numberless dreams; Ganesha, that passion has worn As the tide wears the dove-gray sands, And with heart more old than the horn That is brimmed from the pale fire of time: Ganesha, with numberless dreams I bring you my passionate rhyme. - Apologies to W.B. Yeats > ghazal = Urdu love poem > bulbul = song bird native to asia |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
On May 22, 12:04 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built
<GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: > In article <1179856060.715226.187...@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, > baloney says... > >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: > >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: > > >> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > >> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > >> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, > >> > anyhow... > > >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > > >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > > >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > >> sounds really nice to my ears. > > >Ganesha girl can dance. > >Although she cannot fly, > >she spins a into a trance > >like Dumbo in the sky. > > >Ganesha girl can sing > >an old-fashioned ghazal. > >Her pretty words take wing > >so like the bulbul's call. > > >Ganesha girl is large > >but graceful on her feet. > >She flows just like a barge, > >and never takes her seat. > > >more trimeter. > > >ghazal = Urdu love poem > >bulbul = song bird native to asia > > I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl > I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl > I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder > Saw the stars crashing > > Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl > Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl > I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder > I saw they stars crashing down > Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
In article <1179883194.407848.48460@q66g2000hsg.googlegroups. com>, George Dance
says... > >On May 22, 12:04 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built ><GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: >> In article <1179856060.715226.187...@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, >> baloney says... > >> >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: >> >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: >> >>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the >>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title >>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, >> >> > anyhow... >> >> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >> >> >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >> >> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >> >> sounds really nice to my ears. >> >> >Ganesha girl can dance. >> >Although she cannot fly, >> >she spins a into a trance >> >like Dumbo in the sky. >> >> >Ganesha girl can sing >> >an old-fashioned ghazal. >> >Her pretty words take wing >> >so like the bulbul's call. >> >> >Ganesha girl is large >> >but graceful on her feet. >> >She flows just like a barge, >> >and never takes her seat. >> >> >more trimeter. >> >> >ghazal = Urdu love poem >> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >> >> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >> Saw the stars crashing >> >> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >> I saw they stars crashing down >> > > >Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already >written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome >writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. OOhhhhh, who put the stick up George's butt? don't make me mad, George, you don't want that. most sincerely, GodBuilt -- ----------------------------------------------- "I like to drink, I like to drive, I like to think all of the Jews got out of the Holocaust alive, my name is Mel, and can't you tell, I like Tequila!" Denis Leary |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
On May 22, 6:40 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built
<GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: > In article <1179883194.407848.48...@q66g2000hsg.googlegroups. com>, George Dance > says... > > > > > > > > >On May 22, 12:04 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built > ><GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: > >> In article <1179856060.715226.187...@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, > >> baloney says... > > >> >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: > >> >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: > > >>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > >>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > >>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, > >> >> > anyhow... > > >> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > > >> >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > > >> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > >> >> sounds really nice to my ears. > > >> >Ganesha girl can dance. > >> >Although she cannot fly, > >> >she spins a into a trance > >> >like Dumbo in the sky. > > >> >Ganesha girl can sing > >> >an old-fashioned ghazal. > >> >Her pretty words take wing > >> >so like the bulbul's call. > > >> >Ganesha girl is large > >> >but graceful on her feet. > >> >She flows just like a barge, > >> >and never takes her seat. > > >> >more trimeter. > > >> >ghazal = Urdu love poem > >> >bulbul = song bird native to asia > > >> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl > >> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl > >> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder > >> Saw the stars crashing > > >> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl > >> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl > >> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder > >> I saw they stars crashing down > > >Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already > >written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome > >writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. > > OOhhhhh, who put the stick up George's butt? > > don't make me mad, George, you don't want that. > > most sincerely, > > GodBuilt > No, I don't want that. I don't want to get mad at you, either. Like the President in /Mars Attacks/, my motto is, "Why can't we all just ... get along?" -- > ----------------------------------------------- > "I like to drink, I like to drive, I like to think all of the Jews got out of > the Holocaust alive, my name is Mel, and can't you tell, I like Tequila!" > > Denis Leary- Hide quoted text - > > - Show quoted text - |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"George Dance" <georgedance04@yahoo.ca> wrote in message news:1179883194.407848.48460@q66g2000hsg.googlegro ups.com... > On May 22, 12:04 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built > <GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: >> In article <1179856060.715226.187...@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, >> baloney says... > >> >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: >> >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: >> >> >> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the >> >> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title >> >> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, >> >> > anyhow... >> >> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >> >> >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >> >> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >> >> sounds really nice to my ears. >> >> >Ganesha girl can dance. >> >Although she cannot fly, >> >she spins a into a trance >> >like Dumbo in the sky. >> >> >Ganesha girl can sing >> >an old-fashioned ghazal. >> >Her pretty words take wing >> >so like the bulbul's call. >> >> >Ganesha girl is large >> >but graceful on her feet. >> >She flows just like a barge, >> >and never takes her seat. >> >> >more trimeter. >> >> >ghazal = Urdu love poem >> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >> >> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >> Saw the stars crashing >> >> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >> I saw they stars crashing down >> > > > Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already > written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome > writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. heh... -- ------------------------------------------- AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, Usenet Porn.) |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built" <GodBuilt1999@Yahoo.com> wrote in message news:f3061p08aq@drn.newsguy.com... > In article <1179883194.407848.48460@q66g2000hsg.googlegroups. com>, George Dance > says... >> >>On May 22, 12:04 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built >><GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: >>> In article <1179856060.715226.187...@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, >>> baloney says... >> >>> >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: >>> >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: >>> >>>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the >>>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title >>>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, >>> >> > anyhow... >>> >>> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >>> >>> >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >>> >>> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >>> >> sounds really nice to my ears. >>> >>> >Ganesha girl can dance. >>> >Although she cannot fly, >>> >she spins a into a trance >>> >like Dumbo in the sky. >>> >>> >Ganesha girl can sing >>> >an old-fashioned ghazal. >>> >Her pretty words take wing >>> >so like the bulbul's call. >>> >>> >Ganesha girl is large >>> >but graceful on her feet. >>> >She flows just like a barge, >>> >and never takes her seat. >>> >>> >more trimeter. >>> >>> >ghazal = Urdu love poem >>> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >>> >>> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >>> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >>> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >>> Saw the stars crashing >>> >>> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >>> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >>> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >>> I saw they stars crashing down >>> >> >> >>Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already >>written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome >>writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. > > OOhhhhh, who put the stick up George's butt? Is missing 2 contractions and substituting "they" for the in the last 4 line stanza a stick? > > don't make me mad, George, you don't want that. Ha! this is mikey, isn't it? -- ------------------------------------------- AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, Usenet Porn.) > > most sincerely, > > GodBuilt > > > -- > ----------------------------------------------- > "I like to drink, I like to drive, I like to think all of the Jews got out of > the Holocaust alive, my name is Mel, and can't you tell, I like Tequila!" > > Denis Leary |
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Re: Elephant Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
In article <1179890719.876915.92830@o5g2000hsb.googlegroups.c om>, George Dance
says... > >On May 22, 6:40 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built ><GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: >>In article <1179883194.407848.48...@q66g2000hsg.googlegroups. com>, George Dance >> says... >> >> >> >> >> >> >> >> >On May 22, 12:04 pm, On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built >> ><GodBuilt1...@Yahoo.com> wrote: >> >> In article <1179856060.715226.187...@m36g2000hse.googlegroups .com>, >> >> baloney says... >> >> >> >On May 22, 10:47 am, George Dance <georgedanc...@yahoo.ca> wrote: >> >> >> On May 20, 12:30 pm, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: >> >>>>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with >>the >>>>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a >>title >>>>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too >>strong, >> >> >> > anyhow... >> >> >> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >> >> >> >> >http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >> >> >> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >> >> >> sounds really nice to my ears. >> >> >> >Ganesha girl can dance. >> >> >Although she cannot fly, >> >> >she spins a into a trance >> >> >like Dumbo in the sky. >> >> >> >Ganesha girl can sing >> >> >an old-fashioned ghazal. >> >> >Her pretty words take wing >> >> >so like the bulbul's call. >> >> >> >Ganesha girl is large >> >> >but graceful on her feet. >> >> >She flows just like a barge, >> >> >and never takes her seat. >> >> >> >more trimeter. >> >> >> >ghazal = Urdu love poem >> >> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >> >> >> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >> >> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >> >> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >> >> Saw the stars crashing >> >> >> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >> >> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >> >> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >> >> I saw they stars crashing down >> >> >Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already >> >written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome >> >writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. >> >> OOhhhhh, who put the stick up George's butt? >> >> don't make me mad, George, you don't want that. >> >> most sincerely, >> >> GodBuilt >> > > >No, I don't want that. I don't want to get mad at you, either. Like >the President in /Mars Attacks/, my motto is, "Why can't we all >just ... get along?" i'm trying to figure out what i did that made anyone not get along. most sincerely, GodBuilt -- ----------------------------------------------- "I like to drink, I like to drive, I like to think all of the Jews got out of the Holocaust alive, my name is Mel, and can't you tell, I like Tequila!" Denis Leary |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"Will Dockery" <will.dockery@knology.net> wrote in message news:ab0e1$465711c5$18d62320$27170@KNOLOGY.NET... > > "George Dance" wrote: > >"Will Dockery" wrote: > > > > > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > > > http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > > > > I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > > sounds really nice to my ears. > > Yeah, so I'm going with that, and the other changes you suggested, Did he suggest taking a shower? Did he suggest getting a haircut? Did he suggest you cut down on your drinking? |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
George Dance wrote: >On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built wrote: >> baloney says... >>>George Dance wrote: >>>>"Will Dockery" wrote: > > >>>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > >>>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > >>>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, > >>> >> > anyhow... > >>> > >>> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > >>> > >>> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > >>> >> sounds really nice to my ears. > >>> > >>> >Ganesha girl can dance. > >>> >Although she cannot fly, > >>> >she spins a into a trance > >>> >like Dumbo in the sky. > >>> > >>> >Ganesha girl can sing > >>> >an old-fashioned ghazal. > >>> >Her pretty words take wing > >>> >so like the bulbul's call. > >>> > >>> >Ganesha girl is large > >>> >but graceful on her feet. > >>> >She flows just like a barge, > >>> >and never takes her seat. > >>> > >>> >more trimeter. > >>> > >>> >ghazal = Urdu love poem > >>> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >> >> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >> Saw the stars crashing >> >> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >> I saw they stars crashing down > >Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already >written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome >writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. Heh. -- "Mirror Twins" by W. Dockery-B. Fowler: http://www.myspace.com/shadowvilleallstars "Hasty Pudding" by W. Dockery-H. Conley: http://www.myspace.com/willdockery |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"Will Dockery" <will.dockery@knology.net> wrote in message news:2d636$465c7ff9$18d62320$2856@KNOLOGY.NET... > > George Dance wrote: >>On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built wrote: >>> baloney says... >>>>George Dance wrote: >>>>>"Will Dockery" wrote: >> >> >>>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem > with the >> >>>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make > a title >> >>>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too > strong, >> >>> >> > anyhow... >> >>> >> >>> >> > Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >> http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >> >>> >> >>> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >> >>> >> sounds really nice to my ears. >> >>> >> >>> >Ganesha girl can dance. >> >>> >Although she cannot fly, >> >>> >she spins a into a trance >> >>> >like Dumbo in the sky. >> >>> >> >>> >Ganesha girl can sing >> >>> >an old-fashioned ghazal. >> >>> >Her pretty words take wing >> >>> >so like the bulbul's call. >> >>> >> >>> >Ganesha girl is large >> >>> >but graceful on her feet. >> >>> >She flows just like a barge, >> >>> >and never takes her seat. >> >>> >> >>> >more trimeter. >> >>> >> >>> >ghazal = Urdu love poem >> >>> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >>> >>> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >>> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >>> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >>> Saw the stars crashing >>> >>> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >>> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >>> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >>> I saw they stars crashing down >> >>Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already >>written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome >>writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. > > Heh. Sometimes it snags a vacuous lawsuit. :} -- ------------------------------------------- AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, Usenet Porn.) > > -- > "Mirror Twins" by W. Dockery-B. Fowler: > http://www.myspace.com/shadowvilleallstars > > "Hasty Pudding" by W. Dockery-H. Conley: > http://www.myspace.com/willdockery > > > |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"Amadeus Jinn" wrote: > "Will Dockery" wrote > > George Dance wrote: > >>On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built wrote: > >>> baloney says... > >>>>George Dance wrote: > >>>>>"Will Dockery" wrote: > >>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem > > with the >>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title >>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too strong, anyhow... >>>>> Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > >> http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > > >> >>> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > >> >>> >> sounds really nice to my ears. > >> >>> > >> >>> >Ganesha girl can dance. > >> >>> >Although she cannot fly, > >> >>> >she spins a into a trance > >> >>> >like Dumbo in the sky. > >> >>> > >> >>> >Ganesha girl can sing > >> >>> >an old-fashioned ghazal. > >> >>> >Her pretty words take wing > >> >>> >so like the bulbul's call. > >> >>> > >> >>> >Ganesha girl is large > >> >>> >but graceful on her feet. > >> >>> >She flows just like a barge, > >> >>> >and never takes her seat. > >> >>> > >> >>> >more trimeter. > >> >>> > >> >>> >ghazal = Urdu love poem > >> >>> >bulbul = song bird native to asia > >>> > >>> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl > >>> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl > >>> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder > >>> Saw the stars crashing > >>> > >>> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl > >>> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl > >>> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder > >>> I saw they stars crashing down > >> > >>Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already > >>written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome > >>writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. > > > > Heh. > > Sometimes it snags a vacuous lawsuit. Did Doug Yule complain? The Moody Blues? -- "Ozone Stigmata" (the video): Will Dockery -vocal Henry Conley -guitar Brian Fowler -mandolin Produced and recorded at Echobeast Studios by Brian Fowler, images compiled by A. Jinn. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bxfl_7KvFcc "The Ride (Combat Zone)" (the video) Shadowville All-Stars Recorded at SoHo Columbus, GA 31907 Video by Janis Petersen http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9lZ3VAmNTWc > AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. > (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, > Usenet Porn.) > > > > -- > > "Mirror Twins" by W. Dockery-B. Fowler: > > http://www.myspace.com/shadowvilleallstars > > > > "Hasty Pudding" by W. Dockery-H. Conley: > > http://www.myspace.com/willdockery > > > > > > > > |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"Will Dockery" <will.dockery@knology.net> wrote in message news:bad95$465e12c8$18d62320$20226@KNOLOGY.NET... > > "Amadeus Jinn" wrote: >> "Will Dockery" wrote >> > George Dance wrote: >> >>On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built wrote: >> >>> baloney says... >> >>>>George Dance wrote: >> >>>>>"Will Dockery" wrote: >> >>>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem >> > with the >>>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a > title >>>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too > strong, anyhow... >>>>>> Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" >> >> http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg >> >> >> >>> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' >> >> >>> >> sounds really nice to my ears. >> >> >>> >> >> >>> >Ganesha girl can dance. >> >> >>> >Although she cannot fly, >> >> >>> >she spins a into a trance >> >> >>> >like Dumbo in the sky. >> >> >>> >> >> >>> >Ganesha girl can sing >> >> >>> >an old-fashioned ghazal. >> >> >>> >Her pretty words take wing >> >> >>> >so like the bulbul's call. >> >> >>> >> >> >>> >Ganesha girl is large >> >> >>> >but graceful on her feet. >> >> >>> >She flows just like a barge, >> >> >>> >and never takes her seat. >> >> >>> >> >> >>> >more trimeter. >> >> >>> >> >> >>> >ghazal = Urdu love poem >> >> >>> >bulbul = song bird native to asia >> >>> >> >>> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl >> >>> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl >> >>> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder >> >>> Saw the stars crashing >> >>> >> >>> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl >> >>> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl >> >>> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder >> >>> I saw they stars crashing down >> >> >> >>Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already >> >>written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome >> >>writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. >> > >> > Heh. >> >> Sometimes it snags a vacuous lawsuit. > > Did Doug Yule complain? The Moody Blues? No, but I did "Attribute" them. Plus they are doing other things like drugs or rehab... Fact is, I still think that the court case is completely vacuous. You've heard it: "Even if I had cut/pasted her whole poem" (which I never did) the most that she could possibly sue for is covered in copyright law, which is exactly $0.00) Her attorney will serve me with their "Evaluation Conf." summary by June13th. I have a week to respond with my my reply. All in email. -- ------------------------------------------- AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, Usenet Porn.) > > -- > "Ozone Stigmata" (the video): > Will Dockery -vocal > Henry Conley -guitar > Brian Fowler -mandolin > Produced and recorded at Echobeast Studios by Brian Fowler, images compiled > by A. Jinn. > http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bxfl_7KvFcc > > "The Ride (Combat Zone)" (the video) > Shadowville All-Stars > Recorded at SoHo > Columbus, GA 31907 > Video by Janis Petersen > http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9lZ3VAmNTWc > >> AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. >> (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, >> Usenet Porn.) >> > >> > -- >> > "Mirror Twins" by W. Dockery-B. Fowler: >> > http://www.myspace.com/shadowvilleallstars >> > >> > "Hasty Pudding" by W. Dockery-H. Conley: >> > http://www.myspace.com/willdockery >> > >> > >> > >> >> > > |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
"Amadeus Jinn" wrote: >"Will Dockery" wrote >> George Dance wrote: >>>On The Highways and Bi-Ways God Built wrote: >>>> baloney says... >>>>>George Dance wrote: >>>>>>"Will Dockery" wrote: > > >>>>> > Held off last week, since I'm thinking of a way to fix the problem with the > >>>>> > "Elephant Girl" image you brought up below... which will also make a title > >>>>> > change needed, also, which is no problem since the title isn't too > > strong, anyhow... >>> Something along the lines of "Ganesh Girl" > >> >> http://www.heathenworld.com/swastika/ganesh.jpg > >> > >> >> >>> >> I've also heard the elephant god called Ganesha. 'Ganesha Girl' > >> >> >>> >> sounds really nice to my ears. > >> >> >>> > >> >> >>> >Ganesha girl can dance. > >> >> >>> >Although she cannot fly, > >> >> >>> >she spins a into a trance > >> >> >>> >like Dumbo in the sky. > >> >> >>> > >> >> >>> >Ganesha girl can sing > >> >> >>> >an old-fashioned ghazal. > >> >> >>> >Her pretty words take wing > >> >> >>> >so like the bulbul's call. > >> >> >>> > >> >> >>> >Ganesha girl is large > >> >> >>> >but graceful on her feet. > >> >> >>> >She flows just like a barge, > >> >> >>> >and never takes her seat. > >> >> >>> > >> >> >>> >more trimeter. > >> >> >>> > >> >> >>> >ghazal = Urdu love poem > >> >> >>> >bulbul = song bird native to asia > >> >>> > >> >>> I could escape this feeling, with my Ganesha girl > >> >>> I feel a wreck without my, little Ganesha girl > >> >>> I hear her heart beating, loud as thunder > >> >>> Saw the stars crashing > >> >>> > >> >>> Im a mess without my, little Ganesha girl > >> >>> Wake up mornings wheres my, little Ganesha girl > >> >>> I hear hearts beating, loud as thunder > >> >>> I saw they stars crashing down > >> >> > >> >>Jinn told me the other day that playing with something already > >> >>written, changing the words and images, was a good way to overcome > >> >>writer's block. Perhaps tomorrow you can try changing two words. > >> > > >> > Heh. > >> > >> Sometimes it snags a vacuous lawsuit. > > > > Did Doug Yule complain? The Moody Blues? > > No, but I did "Attribute" them. Plus they are doing other things > like drugs or rehab... Or no internet access in the retirement home... > Fact is, I still think that the court case is completely vacuous. > You've heard it: "Even if I had cut/pasted her whole poem" > (which I never did) the most that she could possibly sue for is > covered in copyright law, which is exactly $0.00) > > Her attorney will serve me with their "Evaluation Conf." > summary by June13th. > > I have a week to respond with my my reply. All in email. The whole thing will be done in email or will it eventually wind up "in person"? -- "Mirror Twins" by W. Dockery-B. Fowler: http://www.myspace.com/shadowvilleallstars "Hasty Pudding" by W. Dockery-H. Conley: http://www.myspace.com/willdockery > AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. > (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, > Usenet Porn.) > > > -- > > "Ozone Stigmata" (the video): > > Will Dockery -vocal > > Henry Conley -guitar > > Brian Fowler -mandolin > > Produced and recorded at Echobeast Studios by Brian Fowler, images compiled > > by A. Jinn. > > http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bxfl_7KvFcc > > > > "The Ride (Combat Zone)" (the video) > > Shadowville All-Stars > > Recorded at SoHo > > Columbus, GA 31907 > > Video by Janis Petersen > > http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9lZ3VAmNTWc > > > >> AJ - http://ClitIns.Com e In. > >> (800 folders. -- kiddie-filtered -- FREE, > >> Usenet Porn.) > >> > > >> > -- > >> > "Mirror Twins" by W. Dockery-B. Fowler: > >> > http://www.myspace.com/shadowvilleallstars > >> > > >> > "Hasty Pudding" by W. Dockery-H. Conley: > >> > http://www.myspace.com/willdockery > >> > > >> > > >> > > >> > >> > > > > > > |
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Re: Ganesha Girl on Rankin by Will Dockery
George Dance wrote:
> On Jun 1, 9:07 am, "Will Dockery" <will.dock...@knology.net> wrote: > >> >>Thanks... with the current discussion on American Haiku, I can see how these >>images could be broken down into a series of haiku-like pieces fairly >>simply. >> >>I'm thinking that'd be a fun experiment. >> > > As Ezra Pound always said, "dichten = condensaire". The tighter your > wording, the more impact each image will have. > Thus, we can see how the series of Dockery's images breaks down into a vaguely- directional trail of uncongealing goo, their few remaining threads slowly sagging to the ground across the bleak /noir/ landscape of his sad pseudoexistence and turns into a park. -- -------(m+ ~/  )_|I do not "negotiate" for half my baby back, Solomon. http://scrawlmark.org |
